Writing Contest Winner!

Thanks a bunch to those who entered my first blog contest. The winner was Ben Fast. His winning entry is below. You can check out his blog at http://befasterblog.wordpress.com

Ben’s entry succeeded because he was sure to use all five of the words listed for the writing exercise contest. His writing was coherent and understandable and interesting to read. Though not required, his entry contained a true beginning, middle, and end to the story.

Congratulations, Ben!

Here’s his winning entry: (the 5 words — remain; trailer; music; family; alarm)

The Little Boy
By Ben Fast

The sun had barely risen over the Arizona desert when a shriek of excitement was heard bouncing off the walls False Creek Canyon.  The little boy had found his wish.

The trailer door burst open and a little ball of red-haired fire shot down the aluminum steps, past the plastic picnic table, and down the dusty path towards a tree fort made less from trees than from wooden crates.  The transformation was about to begin.

The little boy, aged seven, never remained indoors when there were wishes to be found.  Each day, well before his mother’s alarm would buzz on the front bed of the 1962 Sprite trailer (the type with the spare tire under the bed), the little boy would wake up, squeeze his eyes closed again, and think about what he wished for.

Today the little boy wanted to be a pirate.  Never had he seen the ocean, or even a lake, other than the neighbourhood pond.  The neighbourhood pond which had already been dry for five weeks this summer.  And only twice had the little boy been to a swimming pool not made out of plastic – once with his mother when she needed to go shopping in Pheonix and once on a trip with the old lady he called his grandmother.

The fort built in the back corner of the family’s non-descript lot had come from a motorcycle shipped to the man at the end of the row of trailers.  He never rode it, just kept it in a hut and took it out on sunny days to wash it and look at it.  The little boy guessed he wished to be a bike rider.  The little boy had wished that too, last week.

The fort needed to be rearranged from the doctor’s office it had been the day before to the schooner it would serve as today.  Moving the sides of the box into a V shape, pushing an old three-legged chair into the newly formed bow, and using three feathers found the summer before as a flag.  This would be a good wish, thought the boy.

Music started playing from the trailer where the little boy had come from.  Music from Bob Dylan, the little boy’s mother’s favourite.  She had just picked up the new record last week.  The trailer door remained open.  It would be a hot day today – just like all days in the canyon.

A perfect day for wishing, thought the little boy.


About torimcrae

Tori is a good writer aspiring to be a great writer. The mother of four adult kids she is currently pursuing postponed dreams. She enjoys her grandkids, traveling with hubby, spinning fiber, weaving, and raising Shih Tzus. Currently Tori posts to this blog on Mondays and Fridays.
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5 Responses to Writing Contest Winner!

  1. befaster says:

    Hey that’s me! Thanks so much for your comments and for choosing me, this was a really great excersize and I think any writer or non-writer should give it a try, even someone like me who doesn’t consider fiction my main genre!

  2. Pingback: So…I won a writing contest! « @befaster

  3. christicorbett says:

    Congrats to Befaster! Reading your entry was great fun!
    Christi Corbett

    • torimcrae says:

      Christi, Thanks for taking time to congratulate Ben. I don’t know if you went to his blog or not but he doesn’t consider himself a fiction writer and almost didn’t enter. I’m glad you encouraged him. I also thought it was a great effort. Tori


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